I nEEd a tITle
Saturday 2 June 2007
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I nEEd a tiTLE
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pOEm # 2
The isolation pervades the air
like a mist
cold and fresh.
The sunlight breaks
through the tall trees
into
the valley
within a valley.
Silence sits
as silent as
the white cat
that stretches
asleep
in the white
polystyrene box
outside the dormitory door.
A bell rings
and
a patchwork of people
appear.
Shades of umber,
burnt orange, brown
and red
hand dyed and faded.
please write your title(s) in the comments box....
"Dawn into Day"
"Confinement"
"Back to Reality"
thanks anon
they are all really great titles all as good as each other...have a great evening !
"Scumbling Moments"
hi HD
thanks...I really like that word and my friend Jan Dean and I were discussing that word just last week...
because it is a painting term and I "scumble" all the time when I paint it is very interesting to see the word in this context and to descibe a moment....very astute of you.....
regards Kim
Hi Kim, really beautiful poem...just dropped in...Sorry cant think of a title right now....xoxoxo
hi Lisa
"just dropping in" is fine by me !!! lol...thanks
I see you have put your avatar on your blog on BTF too..thanks for the fames...you are a treasure ....
hugs
Title. Another Day In Paradise:
thank you Poetry Girl...the place was quite like paradise....an Ashram....very quiet and peaceful...so your title is really apt......
regards Kim
This really is quite beautiful. Very subtle, and I dig the structure.
As for a title. I've been racking my noggin' and "Within a Moment" appeared.
Have a good day.
hi Morriconei
thank you ....I don't think of structure when I write as it is more a visul "structure"...so that's interesting....
good title...as I was trying to capture a moment in this poem,,
regards Kim